Monday, October 11, 2010

Bonus Content

I posted a thread on Something Awful called "Tell me about losing consciousness and waking up in a hospital." I got a lot of great responses from it. But they required me to re-write what I had so far. Now, I felt what I had was okay (or at least I thought so), but I wanted to match up to reality a little bit more. BUT I saved it for you here! Enjoy.

Warning, the following is NOT beta read.


It was cold. As darkness receded from her mind like a changing tide, the first thing Seraph knew was the cold. There was pain too, but it seemed detach from her person, as if there was a wall between it and her. No, the pain was not important right now what Seraph need was heat. Why was it so cold? Where was she?

Seraph opened her eyes and saw nothing but lights and shadows. Slowly, as if her eyes had to warm up to the idea of working again, her surroundings came into focus. She was laying in bed in a sterile white room. The lights were dimmed and much of the room lay stubbornly in shadows, but Seraph could still make out the thin sheet that covered her, the guardrails on the bed, an empty chair to one side and a pressboard nightstand to the other. A curtain, hung from a track along the ceiling and pulled forward to hide half the room, was almost but not quite blocking a wall mounted TV. Seraph tried to raise her arm and found she couldn't. It was restrained, both of her arms were bound.

She was in an institution.

Mind numbing fear pushed her up right and almost out of the bed before pain finally stopped her. It felt like she had ripped her left arm off and the pain in her head made her want to throw up. She gritted her teeth and squeezed her eyes shut as she breathed through the agony. In through her nose and out through her mouth. In through her nose and out through her mouth. In and out. In and out, in and out.

The pain eventually released its grip on her, allowing Seraph to think once more. She was half out of the bed with one leg already on the floor. Clearly she wasn't tied to it, her right wrist was wrapped in a bandage that secured an IV line. The wrap had done its job well, the IV was still in place despite Seraph's earlier spasm. Her left arm was restrained at least- it was securely immobilized against her body. Judging by the pain radiating from her shoulder, it was probably restrained exactly as it should be. Her face was wet from tears, but she couldn't move her arms well enough to wipe them away. Lifting her head to take in her environment again, she saw that the door, far from being locked and barred, was slightly ajar, letting bright light spill in from the hallway. This was not a magic institution.

Seraph carefully laid back down. She was pretty hurt, yet bandaged up. This must be a hospital.

Why was she in a hospital?

Thinking back, Seraph clearly remember her evening with Mrs. Miller. She remembered Mrs. Miller giving her the ring... then leaving... then... she couldn't remember. What had happened after she got the ring? The ring!

The ring had been in her jeans pocket. Now, Seraph was wearing a standard hospital paper apron. Did the hospital have her clothes and the ring, or had they been lost? Seraph didn't feel the items once she found them, would that change if she really had lost one? If not, how would she get it back?

Next to her hand were the bed controls, featured predominantly was the 'call nurse' button. Seraph pressed it, at least some of her questions would be answered. After a moment she turned on the heating pad. There, two problems solved.

Monday, October 4, 2010

The Quest: Chapter 16

Been awhile huh? Let me go back and re-read this, I don't remember what happens.

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Oh, right! Well, I have two big bits of info here. The first is I finally kicked Seraph out of the closet. The second I kicked the gods out of a different closest- revealing them as real, active players... in whatever it is that they are doing.

The scene had originally set out to just out Seraph. I haven't been able to establish her as gay so far, but I didn't want to spring that on the readers in the second book when Seraph gets with her love interest. I would have liked to bring it up earlier, but I would have had to shoehorn it in there. So I decided to shoehorn it in here!

Of course I had a hard time making it fit, but really this was the only place for it. After this is the climax and the aftermath, so there's no time for her to chill and talk. I don't remember when I decided to make Brad gay too, but his coming out segue for Seraph bring it up as well.

The god thing was a last minute addition, but I like out it turned out. It covers Seraph's coming out with an exposition dump that really will be important later ( OR WILL IT?) and it does a little bit of world building, just to remind you that this... isn't the world you know. =0

(I know that's a quote, but I don't remember from what =P)

Going to also post some bonus content for this chapter! =D

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