I've noticed that, over time, the sting of criticism isn't as bad as it used to be. This is another chapter that required me to almost completely re-write it. In its original form Seraph goes into the pit, fights the monster, almost loses but doesn't, wins, and leaves. You could have skipped it entirely and understood the next chapter.
That is not the mark of a good chapter.
Something surprising needed to happen. Only one thing was a given, Seraph's survival, but everything I could change. I could even have made her lose the fight. You would have had to read the chapter then huh?
I found having the fight leave the arena added a good chaotic dynamic. =3 Interestingly, I found that even after I kicked Seraph and the Oni onto the warehouse floor I wasn't doing a lot with the crowd. Almost every interaction or observation of them I had to add back in after writing Seraph and the Oni's part.
I do love the way I ended this chapter, but I'm also sad that I had to remove one of my favorite lines that I've saved for months to put here. I'll try and add it to the next chapter, but I'm not going to force it. If it doesn't fit I'll just put it here for you guys to read. =)
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